Students'+Description+Paragraphs

Oleksii Plaunov

Ipod Touch 4
====Ipod Touch is a brand which is used by multinational company Apple Inc. for the line of media gadgets with touch-screens. The popularity rate of these products was raising higher each year since it was presented to public in Sep 2007 by Apple founder Steve Job.==== ====iPod Touch 4 has innovative and highly-ergonomic design. Each year Apple makes new design features and introduces new enhanced of iPod Touch together with new iPhone. The specific of iPod Touch is that iPod and iPhone are multimedia devices, with the software that is similar and that is why any application made for iPhone is made for the iPod too. They are similar in their software, design and usability. iPod Touch has two new built-in cameras in front and back of the device and that is a new feature for this series.==== ====To conclude this description - iPod Touch is considered to have the best design in multimedia gadgets and thats include its functionality, quality assembled parts and multifunctional features with the perfect bright screen.====

Korablina Vira __ My __ __ favorite hamburger __ I like eating hamburgers a lot. I’m not talking about a hamburger as a fast food from McDonald’s. Believe it or not, some of them (hamburgers) can be good for health, although they contain a lot of calories. Unfortunately, there are not many restaurants in Ukraine, where you can eat a really delicious hamburger. But there is a place in Kam’anets-Podilsk, a bistro-bar “London”, where are cooked the best hamburgers in the world, to my mind. This hamburger is called “Big Ben”, it is quite big and nourishing, and that is why I advise you to eat it instead of your lunch or supper. Just imagine: juicy grilled chopped meat covered with unbelievable mayonnaise sauce adding garlic and dill; fresh green lettuce leaves and ripe red tomatoes, white onion and little canned cucumbers in a big crunchy fragrant bun with seasam seeds. I swear to you - everything in this hamburger is extremely fresh-baked and appetizing. Bon appétit!

Kornilova Maryna, gr.11

Mint tea with honey

My favorite drink is mint tea with honey and lemon. Its pleasant smell and rich taste fills you with freshness, cleans your thoughts and feelings. To be more detailed it is like a cool shower in hot weather, like a light summer breeze blowing in your face when you're lying in the shade of a tree looking at the sky, clear blue sky. Once you make a sip you are transported back there, oblivious to the anxiety feelings. Nothing can compare with this sensation of lightness, which fills your body. Flowing emotions, memories, images of pleasant moments pop up in your head one after another. And who would have a thought that it is just a cup of tea? That’s an art that like a trigger starts the whole series of sensations.

//Tyshchyshyna Kateryna, Group 11//

**Asus netbook**
====Computer is the thing people can not live without nowadays. I want to describe Asus net book. It is white and small. Diagonal is 14 inch. It has QWERTY keyboard with Cyrillic letters either. The top of computer is glossy. Screen is glossy either and has black rim. On the right corner of is shown special lamps. The main of it is charger lamp, it is red. Net book has 3 usb inputs. Input for SD cards. It has input for TV-set, inputs for microphone and headphones. All of the buttons are white and only one of it is silver. Computer is very light. Overall, computer is very comfortable to use. Moreover, it is very pretty.==== _

__**Peer evaluation of Kateryna's Tyshchyshyna Descriptive paragraph**__

__Tha dominant impression of the paragraph is in this senrence:"Computer is the thing people can not live without nowadays". The details of the description are in a specific order. That order is from the top to bottom. The part of the descriotion I like the best begins with the words: "Net book has 3 usb inputs. Input for SD cards. It has input for TV-set, inputs for microphone and headphones." The part that can use more details or more specific details begins with the words: "It is white and small". I have questions about appealing to the senses of the reader.I noticed only one transition in the end of the essay, it's "overall". A place where transitions could be added is right before wirds: "it is white", "Sreen is", "The main of". So the text should have more transitions. There are no other coments.__

__Reviewer's name: Maryna Kornilova__ _

Anastasia Mysyuk, Group #11
 * An Aura**

An aura, being non-visible, potentially possesses vivid descriptive characteristics. Being a mental man`s envelope, an aura doesn’t have physical measures, though is able to be clearly described on the spiritual level. An aura gives the bases for the first impression when one meets a new person. Not having been acquainted with a person yet one usually has some vision of what he or she represents. Scientists say that an aura can be imagined in colours: bright coloures of it for active people, pastel colours for calm people. Another way to describe people`s aura is performed through the matching people to different animals according to similar with particular animals characteristics both physical and mental. Thus, not only visible objects are intended to description.

= //**Peer Evaluation of Anastasia's Mysyuk Descriptive paragraph**// = The dominant impression of the paragraph is this sentence «Being a mental man`s envelope, an aura doesn’t have physical measures, though is able to be clearly described on the spiritual level.» The details of the description are in specific order. That order is ‘from top to bottom’. The part of the description I like best begins with words “An aura gives the bases for the first impression.” The part that can use more details or more specific details begins with the words “people`s aura is performed through the matching people to different animals”. I have questions about general impression of the paragraph because it is rather indifferent whereas it should be more bright and evaluative. I noticed these transitions “though”, “Another way to describe” and “Thus”. A place where transitions could be added or improved is right before the words “An aura gives the bases”, “Not having been acquainted” and “Scientists say”. There such connectors can be use “for instance”, “the first-the second” and “in more detail”. Other comments on the paragraph. Reviewer’s name: Valeria Solodka, gr.11

= = This incomparable loft (Descriptive paragraph) //by Valeria Solodka, group 11//

There is variety of styles in home design, but one of them is especially darling for my heart. That is a bit rough, commodious and smart loft. This style is commonly associated with industrial part of the city of New York – Manhattan. At first, it became popular in 50-th among the Bohemians who took a fancy to neglected factories and transformed them into swanky and fashionable apartments. Thus in this style striking art objects are blending with industrial landscapes. Besides the most distinguishing features of this style are in space organization, used materials and elements. For instance, housing that is made in loft style consist of huge single space harmoniously divided on zones with the help of furniture, glass partitions, colors, different flour coverings and podium. As the result it creates the sense of vast volume. Another loft attribute is usage of such materials like cold metal, rough wood, artificial rust, building glass stone. And also it is common for this style to reveal old brickwork on the walls. Hence this device make atmosphere of naturalness, severity and strength. And the last bright characteristic of loft that brings life and coziness to home is usage of contrast art objects like ethnic tableware and mats, antique mirrors and frames, paintings and comics, exposed tubing and high-technology equipments, and other elements that have impressive character. In this way home design becomes rather creative, stylish and especially smart. All in all loft is a style of design that joins industrial and art traits thus it is spacious and pictorial in the same time.

Ulyana Kormylets 11A

Cell phone Mobile phone is a small world. It is a great invention for the society. To be more detailed, we are going to talk about Nokia 5530 pink. First of all it is a musical phone. In the same way it can be used for games and internet searching. In addition, Nokia 5530 is equipped with an excellent camera, which allows to take pictures or to record a video. Moreover, in landscape mode, a full QWERTY keypad becomes available, which is ideal for people who like to use punctuation in their text messages. And finally, it has got a very nice design, what makes it popular among female users. To sum it up, Nokia 5530 is the most functional and comfortable cell phone. **//Peer evaluation by Tyshchyshyna Kateryna//** The dominant impression of the paragraph is this sentence «It is great invention for society» The details of the description are in specific order. That order is ‘from top to bottom’. The part of the description I like best begins with words “...it has got a very nice design, what makes it popular among female users.” The part that can use more details or more specific details begins with the words “ it has got a very nice design”. I have queations about color of cell phone. I notice these transitions: to be more detailed, to sum up, moreover, finally,first of all, in addition. Transition could be added before te words "It is great invention..," though It is unnecessary.

Viktoria Protsenko gr 11

Description of perfume

The thing I want to describe is especially loved and appreciated by women. This thing is perfume. To be more detailed the thing I am going to describe is Paris Hilton Perfume. It has small pink glass bottle with black parallel lines on it. Due to this lines customer has a feeling that this perfume is elegant and sophisticated. Everybody can sense it even once open the bottle and feel the fragrance of this perfume. There are three notes of the aroma. The top notes are seductive with apple, orange and melon. The heart note is opulent, floral, sweet and pure, created of jasmine, freesia, lily, tuberose, mimose and lily of the valley. The base note is a sweet tone of ylang-ylang, milky-powdery and intensive sandalwood, musk and oakmoss. It is very pleasant to have this magnetic perfume and to use it from time to time, particularly in some very special and significant moments.

The sentence ‘The thing I want to describe is especially loved and appreciated by women’ reflects the dominant expression of the paragraph. The details of the description are organized in a specific way, so that firstly the external view of the object, to be more exact, Paris Hilton Perfume is described, and then its internal ingredient and smell is mentioned. The description is vivid and detailed. My favorite part of the description begins with the words: ‘There are three notes of the aroma’. The paragraph is well structured. One can define the topic sentence, descriptive part and vivid conclusive sentence.
 * Peer Evaluation of Viktoria’s Protsenko Descriptive Paragraph (Anastasia Mysyuk, Group #11)**

Olena Chemodanova Description: a place, where I feel good When I think about a place, where I have felt happy, the Polish Embassy immediately comes to my mind. When I get there, I fell into the heaven of my beloved Polish language, spoken by everyone around me. Solemn marble stairs, covered with the red carpet, led into the wide pompous hall on the first floor. The walls were decorated with Polish coats of arms. In each room there were Polish and European Union flags, and I took some photos near them. All officials of the Embassy, starting from guard to diplomats, were extremely polite. In the end of the evening we had tasty and rich feast. The whole atmosphere was festive and jolly. So, I have remembered the Polish Embassy like a place I want to return in. The dominant impression of the paragraph is this sentence: “When I get there, I fell into the heaven of my beloved Polish language, spoken by everyone around me.” The details of the description are in a specific order (for example, top to bottom, time order, and so forth). That order is a time order. The part of the description I like best begins with the words: “When I get there, I fell into the heaven of my beloved Polish language…” The part that can use more details or more specific details begins with the words: “Solemn marble stairs, covered with the red carpet…” I have questions about absence of the transitional devices at the beginning of the sentences. I noticed this transition: “When I get there.” A place where transitions could be added or improved is right before the words: “The walls were decorated”, “The whole atmosphere”, "All officials", "In the end of the evening." Reviewer’s name: //Iaroslav Denysenko.//

// Iaroslav Denysenko, group No. 4 //

Landscapes from Berlin’s TV Tower

 There is a magnificent vista on the capital of Germany from Berlin’s TV Tower on the height of 203 m. First of all, when you look from the tower from west to east, you may see how picturesque the Museum Island is. There are situated a New Museum, an Old Museum and the Berlin’s Cathedral, whose dome looks from such height very amazing. Looking east from the tower, you may see the spectacular landscapes of Spandau and Mitte urban districts. There are seen a lot of pretty houses since XIX century. The next one part of the city you will see from TV Tower is East Berlin. It is seen as a wide web of streets, where are situated a lot of grey blocks of flats,  that were built there during the Soviet occupation since 1949 to 1989. The last one part of Berlin you will see from Berlin’s TV Tower, will be West Berlin,  where are situated skyscrapers and beautiful buildings of neoclassical and postmodern architectural styles. So, you may see miscellaneous architecture and spectacular landscapes from Berlin’s TV Tower.

The dominant impression of the paragraph is this sentence,"There is a magnicifent vista on the capital of Germany from Berlin's TV Tower on the height of 203 m." The details of the description are in a specific order. That order is a space order round from the west to the east. The part of the description I like best begins with the words,"There are situated a New Museum..." I have a little question about the structure; it seems to me that not every sentence relates directly to the topic sentence. I noticed these transitions,"first of all," "the next," "the last," "so." A place where transition could be added is right before the words, "looking east from the tower." Other comment is that this paragraph rather infotmative and interesting. Reviewer's name: Olena Chemodanova

Polikarchuk Iryna, group 4

The best place ever

The best place where one can feel himself cosy and comfortable is a small wooden house in the mountains. One can immediately feel fresh winter air with a specific wooden smell. The house consists of one room, a kitchen and a bathroom only. The kitchen is situated on the right side of the entrance. The bathroom is situated next to the kitchen (on the right side too). The room is situated on the left side of the entrance. The house is decorated in a village style. The walls are wooden. A big soft sofa is situated in the room near the wide window. There is a small wooden table on the left side of the sofa. An armchair is situated next to the table and on the right side of a stone fireplace. A person feels comfortable sitting in a wicker chair with a checked plaid near the fireplace. The floor is covered with the sheep’s skin. This small mountain house is like a cosy island in an ocean of one’s life.

The dominant impression about this paragraph is a sentence: “This small mountain house is like a cosy island in an ocean of one’s life.” It sounds not academic, but poetical and because of that it touches me deeply. The order of details is from the right side to the left side of the house. The part of description I like best begins with the words “An armchair is situated next to the table and on the right side of a stone fireplace.” This text may have more transitions. There are no other comments. Reviewer’s name – Natalia Stepanchuk

Mariya Ivashko, A-4

Native Street in Winter

My native street is fairy in winter. There is too much snow, which covers every house, every tree and everything seems sleepy. The snowdrifts are so huge that tunnels can be done in them, that is why, drifts are very similar tothe caves,where thegnomeslive. Everything in the street is so white, that eyes are blinded. Moreover, when the sun begins to shine, the snow begins to sparkle and the iciclesshimmer and the sleepykingdomcomes to life. Firstly, children appear, they sledge, play snowballs and shout loudly. Then appears adults, always hurrying, and the fairy street is filled with different sounds. As a result, silence is broken and the kingdom lives its usual winter life.

Tanya Kosmina

Group 4

//Descriptive paragraph //

In July 2009, Lublin was really incredible. Summer days made the nature of this city brighter, and it was buried in verdure and flowers. Jolly walks in the afternoon and romantic walks around the night town that was lighted with hundred street lamps, which were reflected in eyes of everyone like evening sun in the lake, can not be forgotten. Assuredly, an ancient Polish architecture pleasantly amazed me and made all the tourists taking many photos in different angles, but the modern buildings also could not left anyone indifferent, especially the glittering shop windows of the most popular boutiques where the sales of fashionable clothes were like vivid pictures with moving youth. Really that summer Lublin was full of extraordinary young tourists from every corner of the globe who enjoyed either noisy city core or comfortable small cafes with delicious Polish desserts, which smelled nice, and good quiet music, which helped to forget about problems and just to relax. All these foregoing facts made my stay in Lublin one of the best memorable periods of my life.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 19px;">The dominant impression of the paragraph is in this sentence: " That summer Lublin was full of extraordinary young tourists from every corner of the globe who enjoyed either noisy city core or comfortable small cafes with delicious Polish desserts that smelled nice and good quiet music which helped to forget about problems and just to relax.<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 19px;">" The details of the description are in a specific order. That order is the one of five sences. The part of the description I like best begins with the words "That summer Lublin..." All parts have enough details. I have question about the possibility to make sentences shorter. I noticed these transitions: "all these foregoing facts". The place where transitions could be added is in front of the words "an ancient", "that summer". <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',serif; font-size: 19px;">Ilchenko Svitlana

Natalia Stepanchuk, A-4

Descriptive Paragraph

My Granny’s House

My Granny’s house is a perfect place for relaxation and recreation. It is a very quite place. You can hardly hear any hum of an auto engine, but beautiful songs of birds and rustle of leaves because an old garden is around the house. In spring all trees in the garden is covered with blossom, in summer and autumn they are covered with delicious apples, plums and pears. In my Granny’s house a man can eat healthy food: fresh fruits and vegetables grown without nitrates and toothsome meals cooked with firewood. Moreover one can feel not only an aroma of appetizing meals but also a unique nowadays smell of really fresh and pure air. It is especially fresh in the morning. If a man is not afraid of coolness he can have a walk barefoot on the grass early in the morning. A touch of grass, wet because of early dew, is a unique impression, which makes a person fell himself brisk and energetic during the day. Therefore visiting my Granny’s house is a chance to have a rest and also to upgrade one’s health and fell yourself closer to the nature.

==== The dominant impression about this paragraph is this sentence: "My Granny’s house is a perfect place for relaxation and recreation." The details of the description aren't in a specific order, but their organization is connected with 5 senses. The part of the description I like best begins with the words "A touch of grass, wet because of early dew..." I have not any questions. I noticed these transitions: "moreover", "therefore", but there are not enough transitions for connection sentences in this paragraph. A place where transitions could be added is right before the words "You can hardly hear..." (for ex., that is why) or before the words "In my Granny’s house..." (besides) and so on. ====

Ilchenko Svitlana

Descriptive Paragraph

A place that merits to be named as comfortable and supportive to stay for a long period is required to be under a wood side on a mountain decline. It could be a small wooden building or a tent, it is of no consequence. Whereas an extremely essential feature of this place is a large panorama of mountains occupying the whole horizon. The skyline restricted with mountain tops contributes to thinking process, encouraged brainwork. When one’s eye is capable of viewing huge geological forms the thought is able to penetrate in the deepest mysteries of the Universe.

As few as possible representatives of the human beings are allowed to stay at this idyllic place. For example, a shepherd may come once every day with a flock of sheep. Purchasing a liter of milk and a piece of cheese would be exhaustive communication.

The dominant colors of this place – green forest and blue sky and mountain tops – are necessary to create a unique atmosphere of philosophical loneliness, serve conducive to recollect one. It is commonly known that blue color decreases temperature and helps to relax and green color is irreplaceable for developing creative atmosphere.

This place has to sound similar to the world of Tibet monks, as an ordinary person usually imagines it. Only voices of nature exist at this wood side, such as creak, whisper and rustle. And the smells are corresponding to the sounds.

Description Paragraph
My balcony.

The best memories of December 2011 I associated with smoking on the balcony. Smoking was my only consolation during preparation for exams, missed practice seminars, reports, presentations, etc. Since then balcony becomes for me something more than just a place.

Balcony - not just part of the building, it’s an eye of the building. You can not understand the world looking from the window - you must go to the balcony for this. This is where you will take the first rays of the sun, this is where you breathe the air of a new day and feel that the day is really new, this is where you will see everything that you must to see before you start and finish your day.

That's why I still often go out to the balcony, though I threw smoke month ago.